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I Don't Know How
You know I've got so much love to give you
So what will I do now that you're gone
This love in my heart that I have for you
It's perfect to light up the sky at dawn
Each morning my cradle, I feel you smile
These dew drops on the glass are all your tears
I close my eyes and you live for a while
When I wake up it all just disappears
My feet touch the floor you once crawled upon
And walk on past the room where you would dream
But its all dark now, the curtains are drawn
The sadness a snare; I choke out a scream
Salt burns down my face, I can't let go now
Try to forget you, but I don't know how
I actually wrote this poem last night. It sort of poured out of me, after reading a story of yet another child's untimely death in the hands of pure cruelty. Asking myself, "Why?" and I didn't get a good answer. It was after reading a blog post by Breeze Daze about little Victoria Stafford. You can read that blog post here. Insanity and evil don't make sense to me. But I could feel the pain that a parent would in this situation, or that anyone feels who has lost a loved one tragically and unexpectedly.
I was able to add the 3WW words to it this morning, one line changed a bit and I think the poem is better for it now. Also, this poem is destined to be a song .... I've already started working on a melody.
Update as of Aug 8th 2009: It is now a song as well, and I will post it as soon as I have a good recording.
photo credit flower beauty
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Yeah...I needed a kleenex
Well done.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
touching and well written. Best wishes for the song.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Yes...I needed some when I wrote it.
It was nice to read your poem just now, lifted my spirits :)
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Gritty, gripping and well-said. When you get a melody, let me know.
Snare
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
I will let you know, yes.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
It will make a haunting ballad. Beautiful and tragic.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Very sad piece. I could feel the emotion.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Full of sadness expressed in such a heartfelt way.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Thank you Angel, Dee, and Sarah I've checked out your blogs too (actually Sarah, your name doesn't link one, do you have one?)..I sure love all the different things that come out of the word prompts.
I have a guitar part and a melody...it's coming along. I will share here on the blog when its ready.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Emotional piece, well delivered.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
A strong tribute to this child and children like him or her. I agree cruelty isn't the answer. I can also hear the song in this piece trying to find it's way. A melody would be perfect. Have a great night.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
It is heartbreaking. You're written this well and it would make a lovely ballad.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Yeah, I 'm singing this, and I think it could develop into a cool song!
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Thank you Michelle, Andy, and Tumble. The song is coming along too...it's close to done. The melody for the chorus is really strong, so nice. I'm just working on some details for the verses.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
very sad, very emotional, definitely would make a great ballad
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Nicely woven.
6/03/2011 10:10 AM
Well...it had been successfully turned into a song. I will be posting it shortly, once I figure out the best way to record it. Just had to figure out what's up with the microphone.
6/03/2011 10:11 AM
Really enjoyed poem and song. Like the way you blended the stanzas of the song and poem back and forth weaving a very effective story. Thanks Love it Cecelia